Please review my song - IE: Rip it apart!

Posted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 2:13 pm

The song is “Stuck at the Starting Line” and it's on my MySpace page:

http://www.myspace.com/dseger

I’d like to get some input on the lyrics, arrangement, etc. Some specific questions include:

1) Does it need a bridge?
2) Does it sound too typical? IE: do you think it sounds original, or have I just written another mass produced radio drone?
3) I think it starts out a little slow. Would it help if I start by singing the hook once? Not the whole chorus, just “Stuck at the Starting Line” and then modulate up to the verse.

Thanks in advance.
-David Seger

Posted: Tue Jan 23, 2007 1:20 pm

So the song is completely perfect and requires no changes at all? Wink

Or perhaps it's so bad there are no words? Sad

Seriously though, any comments are welcome - on either end of that scale. I'm just trying to improve as a writer.

Thanks,
-David

Posted: Sun Feb 04, 2007 10:06 pm

well I'm in the same position as you are.
I just posted a message asking for advice just like you did!
So maby we could give eachother advice.
in my opinion, the concept of the song is great. maby you could add some extra simple instruments in the second half or in the end such as a tamborine of a shaker.
great song though.

well if you dont mind taking a listen to my song, heres a link to my post.
http://recording.org/ftopict-40710.html

hey send me a friend request sometime.
myspace.com/SamMillerAcoustic
see ya arround
-Sam

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