It's a good start, the snare is snappy - did you mic top and bottom?
Now, on to the guitars:
The guitars have too much low end in them.
Try scooping out some of it from 80-250Hz, then boost (yes, boost) a fairly narrow band around 300Hz.
Then, bring them down a notch or two in the mix.
Does the left guitar have a gate (on the track or on the amp itself)?
The right guitar rings into almost every stop, whereas the left seems to stop dead, which is good - make them both do it.
Try a gate on the right if there isn't one already, try to keep it from ringing into the stops (it's especially prevalent at the very end going into the applause).
All in all, nice job, keep up the good work!
Edit> BTW, I A/B'ed your mix against King Diamond - Blood to Walk, in case you were wondering...
I was going to compare it to the newest Iron Maiden single, but it sounds like crap in my opinion - pretty disappointing, I must say.
I think that qualifies me as a metal head.
But what of my love for Pink Floyd... And Captain Beefheart... ??