One Night Stand

DogsoverLava 9 January 2020

Here's a new song. Lyrically this has a "recovery" theme. I may add a little more guitar if necessary but my objectivity is starting to shift a bit so this is a good start for some criticism and mix direction. As always - thanks to anyone who takes the time to listen and feel free to offer any feedback be it opinion or expertise - I'll take it all. Regards. Rob.

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One Night StandM5.mp3 (11.4 MB)

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I'd probably add an upper harmony in the bridge, Rob ... and the

kevinwhitect Mon, 01/13/2020 - 12:42

I'd probably add an upper harmony in the bridge, Rob ... and then really fill out the chorus with a dense blend of additional harmonies to pop it. Good start on this.

The really low end is a bit overwhelming with my sub on, and non

Boswell Mon, 01/13/2020 - 13:10

The really low end is a bit overwhelming with my sub on, and non-existent without it. I agree with Kevin that the vocal line needs some variation - selective harmony would add the extra interest. Good work, though.

Thanks @kevinwhitect and @Boswell - this one needs lots of work

DogsoverLava Mon, 01/13/2020 - 15:01

Thanks kevinwhitect and Boswell - this one needs lots of work still in the arrangement. It’s got good bones but lacks excitement for sure.

Pretty good. Seems the stereo guitars are too loud. Vocals a bit

LarryQualm2 Sat, 01/18/2020 - 00:55

Pretty good. Seems the stereo guitars are too loud. Vocals a bit pitchy. Song tends to drag a bit - maybe have some more instruments (keys) join in to build up each verse to a higher energy.

Comments

I'd probably add an upper harmony in the bridge, Rob ... and the

The really low end is a bit overwhelming with my sub on, and non

Thanks @kevinwhitect and @Boswell - this one needs lots of work

Pretty good. Seems the stereo guitars are too loud. Vocals a bit

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