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Hey guys - I'd appreciate any feedback on this song and mix - Stadium rock feel-good chorus meets personal introspective in this frozen in time moment...

Guitar solo outro chorus intentionally quotes a wee bit of Blind Melon - lots of guitars and vocal tracks (double and triple tracked) with (hopefully) some really neat sounds. Very straight forward drums and a classic bass track that doesn't step on anything...

https://recording.o…

Seems to be an issue with the uploading playing the complete file... here's a soundcloud link.

[MEDIA=soundcloud]dogsoverlava/spiritv5[/MEDIA]

Attached files SpiritV5.mp3 (12.2 MB) 

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DogsoverLava Tue, 04/21/2020 - 11:12

I've had some issues uploading the file - trying again here.

[MEDIA=audio]https://recording.o…

It's weird because when trying to play using the native player it only plays about half way through - but when I "open with" and use Windows media player or other players it plays fine. Anyway - this is the latest mix -- a couple changes made: added some verb to the snare drum and a bit more compression to it, and balanced the guitars a wee bit more.... Things I hear possible are the need to ride the vocal farer a bit more in the chorus - a couple words spike the volume a bit and grab my ear....

One question I have is in the last chorus I'm playing a lead guitar line that's playing a distinctly different parallel melody quoting Blind Melon's "No Rain"... Does this work for you? - I'm essentially highlighting the dialogic element to feel good songs - that they exist as part of an interlocking historical dialog with each other in form - and reintroducing an element of sadness to the chorus that shows both sides of that coin (as well as setting up the outro solo)... do you get that?

Anyway - any thoughts on this mix V7 would be great.

Note - I also created a video for this song using mix 5 as part of my learning on this project. Thoughts or comments welcome there too.

Here also is a dropbox link to the .wav file

https://www.dropbox.com/s/4hsaij77sb1iiy3/SpiritV7.wav?dl=0

Attached files SpiritV7.mp3 (12.2 MB) 

pcrecord Wed, 04/22/2020 - 04:48

Hey thanks for sharing.
I'm just not sure why asking comments and opinions on your song after it's already being published.
I thought it sounded nice, apart for the vocals over powering the rest of the band a bit in the choruses. I feel that the vocals take all the space and leave the band a bit weak when the backvocals come in.. But it's a minor thing.. ;)

DogsoverLava Wed, 04/22/2020 - 10:07

pcrecord, post: 463957, member: 46460 wrote: Hey thanks for sharing.
I'm just not sure why asking comments and opinions on your song after it's already being published.
I thought it sounded nice, apart for the vocals over powering the rest of the band a bit in the choruses. I feel that the vocals take all the space and leave the band a bit weak when the backvocals come in.. But it's a minor thing.. ;)

Thanks PC - published for me just means my mom and my wife have heard it.... I’ll take feedback any time as I’m still working on the audio file. I did the video for fun and motivation as a learning experience. I agree that the chorus vocals are a tiny bit too prominent. I’ll pay attention to that and see what I can do.

DogsoverLava Wed, 04/22/2020 - 16:22

audiokid, post: 463959, member: 1 wrote: Ya, I like your sound and style. Your work always reminds me of our cool Vancouver band, 54-40. https://www.5440.com/ If I was mixing this, I would try to make the drums sound more live, like Ocean Pearl .

Thanks Chris - realize that I've been writing in a very early 80's Vancouver rock style... I'll revisit the drums - they were setup as a dry Ayotte kit profile which I really like tracking with - I only added a little verb on the snare in later mixes (post V5) - I'll maybe try and get a bit more life from them -- drums are my weakest link so far. I really appreciate the feedback. I'm still building my production chops as a producers which is helping shape and evolve the sound while zeroing in on it at the same time.

audiokid Thu, 04/23/2020 - 09:02

DogsoverLava, post: 463954, member: 48175 wrote: It's weird because when trying to play using the native player it only plays about half way through - but when I "open with" and use Windows media player or other players it plays fine.

I was able to upload and play it through to the end with no issues.

DogsoverLava Fri, 04/24/2020 - 12:11

audiokid, post: 463965, member: 1 wrote: I was able to upload and play it through to the end with no issues.

Thanks Chris - I think the file is good - it might have had something to do with how it pre-loads in HTML5 and when it starts playing and how certain browsers handle that -- so could be server side and/or user side and related to specific browsers. Just glad you guys could play it. I finally got it to play through too . Thanks for working with me behind the scenes to troubleshoot.

Smashh Sun, 04/26/2020 - 10:35

I like the song . The instruments are all in sync and tight .
My 5 cents , id like to hear the drums in a room and take up a bigger piece of the pie along with the bass being bigger.
the stabbing guitar is taking too much space . i would filter out a the lows of that guitar and give that space to the bass
Then the vocals might sit more comfortable .
Also rock anthem is played in an arena ...
nice job Rob

stevie_m Sun, 04/26/2020 - 21:11

Robbie, so much cool stuff going on here. Rhythm guitars nicely stereoized and propel the track. Really nice vocal harmonies all over the place. The solo @ 2:48 is awesome (with that tasteful pinch harmonic). How are you getting that synth effect? Some kind of synth simulator in parallel? I wanted more sustain and bigger sound on the outro guitar lead with the tremolo/slicer effect. The tone feels a bit too small. The playing is great and fits the pocket nice, I would just make it sound bigger. Really cool rocker overall. I can't remember, do you use VSTs for your guitar tones?