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Hey All,

I originally posted this on reddit and in the comments a user recommended that I post this song at this site in this particular thread. Here was his feedback on this mix:

I like what this could be but I found the oscillation of the sound way too distracting -- I wanted longer decays and a more smoothed out or gentle oscillation --- maybe the effect of that in particular much less wet in your mix (lower level), and then a generally wetter mix altogether. The effect of this instead sounded more like someone futzing with a volume knob which changed air pressure and actually hurt my ears --- I liked it - but I wanted more psy or trance -- more Bristol sound.

It did get me to go back to this mix and try to fix some things. I originally had the logic space designer small recording room reverb on the entire mix set really low (-30DB). But when I switched it to small recording stage it really helped open up the mix. I tried some medium room reverbs like Nice Room and I thought the small studio stage sounded better.

But anyways, I have been working on this mix for awhile and I've got it to a point where its the best I can make it.

I never studied audio engineering or anything, I do have many years of experience recording music and have learnt things a long the way just from experimentation. I still do a lot of guessing.

Here is the track:

[MEDIA=soundcloud]interwoven/shifting-focus?in=interwoven/sets/evolver[/MEDIA]

I would love to hear your feedback. Really appreciate it, thanks!

Comments

Sean G Sun, 08/14/2016 - 17:04

So where is the track ?

Try using the "Upload A File" button at the bottom right of the post window. You can upload an Mp3 @ 320kbps maximum (no wav files).

You will get more responses uploading the file here than just posting an external link to your song.

I for one, like many others here will not click on a link I am unfamiliar with.

- Sean.

DonnyThompson Mon, 08/15/2016 - 04:43

Sean's preferences echo that of many RO members, in that generally, most RO members don't like to be directed to another site to listen to music, and we are all very cautious and hesitant about actually downloading any file posted by someone whom we aren't yet familiar with.

As Sean suggested to you, when seeking a mix critique, your best chance is to upload your file directly here.

You can upload your song here by clicking on the "upload a file" button, located below the post window, at the bottom right side, just to the right of the "post reply" button. This will open your computer's directory, where you can choose the file you wish to upload.
RO's player will support MP3's as high as 320kbps; the higher the resolution of the file, and depending on your connection speed, the longer it will take, but at "common" upload speeds and average file resolution, (128kbp) it shouldn't take any longer than a few minutes or so... Although the better the resolution you upload, the more we can help, because we don't have to deal with listening thru wizzly sonic artifacts that can occur with lower res files, and that aren't indicative of your actual mix.

Also, if you can provide some basic info on your recording rig - things such as preamp/interface, particular mics used, DAW platform, your studio monitors make and model, if you are mixing through monitors or headphones, any acoustic treatment you have in your mixing space, etc., this info can help us to be more helpful to you in terms of engineering/production suggestions and advice.
Generally, we focus on the engineering end of things, and tend to shy away from making any musical suggestions - unless asked, or unless there is something happening musically that we feel may be adversely affecting the sonics of the mix.

Welcome to RO. :)
-donny

bouldersound Tue, 08/16/2016 - 12:33

The left channel is clipping on practically every kick beat. There's a bunch of 130Hz energy in the left channel that isn't in the right, as if the bass is panned left, and that seems to be contributing to the clipping kick. It sounds like the kick is also making a mix compressor pump. Overall it's fairly loud at about -8.5dB RMS on the left and about -11dB RMS on the right (square wave). The TT DR Meter dynamic range reads 4.9 left/6.8 right.

pcrecord Tue, 08/16/2016 - 16:31

Hey Welcome Polyblip !

To add to Bouldersound comments. The first thing that disturb me is that the dynamics are all screwed up with too much compression.
I'd suggest you try to present us with a mix not an attempt to be the loudest possible. The final levels are taken care at mastering not in the mixing phase. We are in fix that mix after all ;)
The thing with the dynamics is that it isn't just the pumping but the sounds of the vibratos are also making the ears go nuts..
Passed those problems, I didn't have energy left to listen to the song. The arangement seems nice... I'm sure it could be better without that ton of compression...
Please post another version !

DonnyThompson Fri, 08/19/2016 - 02:31

bouldersound, post: 440557, member: 38959 wrote: The left channel is clipping on practically every kick beat. There's a bunch of 130Hz energy in the left channel that isn't in the right, as if the bass is panned left, and that seems to be contributing to the clipping kick. It sounds like the kick is also making a mix compressor pump. Overall it's fairly loud at about -8.5dB RMS on the left and about -11dB RMS on the right (square wave). The TT DR Meter dynamic range reads 4.9 left/6.8 right.

Arrangement and art aside, truthfully, I didn't get very far into the song before I hit "stop", as the compression pumping made it really tough for me to listen to. I'll take Boulder's word for it about the other stuff mentioned.

Time to go back to square one on this mix, I think.

Polyblip Fri, 08/19/2016 - 09:09

Hey thanks for the feedback!

Wow I didn't know that it was painful to listen too. That sucks, as the goal is the opposite :) But thats why I am here.

So what I am hearing so far is that its way to loud with too much compression.

Here is what I changed.

Lowered all tracks in the mix by about 6.0DB. Removed master compression. Panned bass more towards the center.

So here is another version. Hopefully this one is listenable. Should I lower it even more?

Let me know what changes you think should be made and I will keep making the changes and uploading a new version. Maybe by the end we can compare the original with the new one after feedback and see what the comparison is like.

[MEDIA=audio]http://recording.or…

Attached files focused6-remix.mp3 (8.8 MB) 

bouldersound Fri, 08/19/2016 - 09:59

It's still clipping frequently on the left channel. Overall and especially from the guitars I'm hearing a ton of 440Hz. There's also a lot of energy below 100Hz. You're going to have to rein something in, whether it's cutting low bass or reducing mastering volume. As it is you're trying to stuff ten pounds into a five pound sack.

Polyblip Fri, 08/19/2016 - 12:35

hi, thanks bouldersound

so I did leave one multiband compressor on the entire mix, because I felt like the song needed it. But I took it out. The song is way quieter now and it should not be clipping anymore. I think this might be a good base to work off of.

So now the clipping and loudness issue fixed? If it is, then where should I go from here?

[MEDIA=audio]http://recording.or…

Attached files focused6-remix2.mp3 (8.8 MB) 

bouldersound Fri, 08/19/2016 - 14:30

I think there's a bit of a crack to some/many kick hits, but now it seems to be just at the track level, not at the mix level. Oh, and I meant to ask about panning the snare left and then stacking the tambourine right over it. How about a more traditional snare position in the center and leave the tambourine over to the side to counterbalance that ride on the right? Then maybe move the keyboard part to the center. It seems to be lacking activity in the middle other than kick/bass.

Even if all you did was lower the volume it's an improvement.

Polyblip Fri, 08/19/2016 - 16:49

Donny you were right, some individual tracks were clipping. I turned on pre-fader metering and all was revealed. I fixed it so no tracks were clipping.

I also panned the snare more towards the center.

Overall comparing the original and the new with edits I can see how terrible all the compression was making the song. I can now hear details I could not before. So this helped a lot. Here is the newest version.

Please keep offering advice, this helps a lot.

One of my concerns is the level of the bass volume. How is it? Can you comment on the level of the drums n bass in the mix?

Thanks!

[MEDIA=audio]http://recording.or…

Attached files focused6-remix5.mp3 (8.8 MB) 

DogsoverLava Fri, 08/19/2016 - 19:20

What I like about this song Poly and why I recommended you come here is the groove you have going, but when I first heard the track it was very painful to listen to, not just all the clipping but then all the sound oscillation that actually made my ears revolt - - this is already much much better but I still have issues with the first 10 or 15 seconds of the track and then the way the oscillations are handled ------- something about that still feels unpleasant to my ears physically.

You do a novel kind of thing with the rest of the track, using both the sound oscillation and the swells & panning rhythmically which is cool --- but there's still something there pushing me away from the track. I want you to listen to the song "Lucky Man" by The Verve off of the album Urban Hymns and see how they handle oscillations and panning and see if that gives you any ideas. I'm not experienced enough as a producer to be sure but part of what I think it is that your track lacks is the anchor soundbed to hold my orientation in the space - like the whole track is going through these volume and tones swells so my ears get have nothing to hold on to to keep the focus and I get disorientated and almost ear sick. Is it that you need a part of the track to hold the centre line while you dance on the outsides? I'm not sure - I hope others speak to this -- but there's still something physically unpleasant about how my ears handle this track - particularly with any volume and with headphones.

DogsoverLava Fri, 08/19/2016 - 20:30

bouldersound, post: 440636, member: 38959 wrote: A more defined center would be nice.

Something you might try: cross panned early reflections on the oscillating parts. That is, one set of early reflections on the left for tracks panned right and one set on the right for tracks panned left. That can make panning less stark.

I just sorted that out on the Stairway mix - I had the acoustic guitar right and sent a verb to the left but I forgot to do the opposite with the recorder parts - sorted that out and the whole track changed for the better.

Polyblip Fri, 08/19/2016 - 23:52

Thanks for the advice Lava, really helpful. I'm not 100% clear though on the reference to oscillation. Does this mean that the sounds intensify in one ear and then the other in rhythmic manner? Or too much tremolo? On a specific instrument? Just a little lost on what oscillations is referring too specifically. But overall I did try and reduce what I think you mean by oscillations.

Here is the updated version. I played around with the panning on some instruments to help define a center. I noticed some tracks were still clipping especially one guitar track so I fixed that. I slight added reverb to the master to help give it more depth.

[MEDIA=audio]http://recording.or…

Attached files focused6-remix9.mp3 (8.6 MB) 

DogsoverLava Sat, 08/20/2016 - 00:55

That works much much better for me as a listener. My ears can handle the track much better in this state.

What I'd want from this now is just a bit more subtlety overall -- it still sounds very hot ..... but what's with the drop out at 2.45? ---- like you rolled the tone knob off ?(if the mix had one) What was the point of that sudden drop out of frequencies?
It's working much better for me though -- now I'd generally direct you to try to make it more elegant production wise --- think of it this way -- imagine a really graceful dancer doing an interpretive dance to this track -- now imagine an MMA wrestler or football player dancing to this track --- for me the track itself wants to be the dancer but it's more the football player --- how can you grace this up a bit and add grace to it -- it's heavy footed.

What I hear here is a conflict between Portishead & Oasis --- Cool vs Hot

pcrecord Sat, 08/20/2016 - 06:35

Much better !
On the technical side, I think the instruments sound like if they were recorded in different places (different ambiance and reverbs)
Althought many like that, I prefer when it sounds like a band in the same room. It's up to you really...

On the artistic side, I still got bounced from left to right when listening to the song.. It is not a mix thing anymore but rather the arrangement. When instruments play back and forth between speakers it can be disturbing to the viewer..
It is why I try to put equally busy tracks on hard panning and not those who just hit and run all the time. If a signer would be added to the equation, it would distract me enough to underminded the focus on the vocal..
Again, it's a preference thing ;)

Polyblip Sat, 08/20/2016 - 11:44

pcrecord, good ear to notice the different reverbs. All the stuff was recorded in my bedroom which basically has no reverb at all. So I added various space designer reverb rooms. I do also like it when it sounds like the band played together. I will keep this in mind along with the instruments bouncing issue.

Polyblip Sat, 08/20/2016 - 15:04

Lava, I like the football player dancer analogy. When I listened to this mix thinking about football player in full suit and gear dancing I realized it did sound heavy handed. haha. Picturing the analogy is just funny, but really helpful.

It made me also realize boulders comment about the kick.

I think the kick was too low. I changed its tone to be a bit higher. And I also did lower it a bit.

I don't think it's quite there yet (elegant vs heavy handed) but its closer.

[MEDIA=audio]http://recording.or…

Attached files focused6-remix10.mp3 (8.6 MB) 

DogsoverLava Sat, 08/20/2016 - 15:57

Polyblip, post: 440650, member: 49952 wrote: Lava, I like the football player dancer analogy. When I listened to this mix thinking about football player in full suit and gear dancing I realized it did sound heavy handed. haha. Picturing the analogy is just funny, but really helpful.

It made me also realize boulders comment about the kick.

I think the kick was too low. I changed its tone to be a bit higher. And I also did lower it a bit.

I don't think it's quite there yet (elegant vs heavy handed) but its closer.

[MEDIA=audio]http://recording.or…

This is already so much better it's like listening to a new song now. I'm going to have to think about this as a new song and evaluate it as it is now - but great job so far.

Polyblip Sun, 08/21/2016 - 21:44

New Updated Version

Changes

- Got rid of all compression on master track.
- Cleaned up some really ugly bassy guitar notes.
- Panned the guitar during the chorus more towards the center to help hold a more defined melody.
- Turned up the bass a bit.
- Turned down all tracks to leave -6Db of headroom for mastering

I think it's really getting there. I've learnt so much in this process. Thanks a lot Lava and everyone else who gave your time to help me. I've been remixing all my songs and learning tons about audio recording.

Now I just turn up the volume on my stereo if I need to feel more energy out of my mix instead of adding compression plugins and such.

[MEDIA=audio]http://recording.or…

Attached files focused6-remix14.mp3 (8.6 MB) 

DonnyThompson Mon, 08/22/2016 - 03:14

Polyblip, post: 440674, member: 49952 wrote: Turned down all tracks to leave -6Db of headroom for mastering

Peak or RMS?

If it's RMS, that's really not very much, actually. If you're planning on sending this out to a pro M.E., that's not gonna give the engineer all that much room to work.
You'd be better off to mix this at a LUFS level of between -23 to -18, with peaks at or around -8db or so. Let the M.E. bring it up to the level that is appropriate for the delivery method you choose.

pcrecord, post: 440641, member: 46460 wrote: On the technical side, I think the instruments sound like if they were recorded in different places (different ambiance and reverbs)
Althought many like that, I prefer when it sounds like a band in the same room. It's up to you really...

Marco has a GREAT ear for this stuff. As long as I've known him, he always has, so it's no surprise to me that he caught the use of different verbs.

For me, I will occasionally use different verbs on a mix, but it's contextual - it depends entirely on the song. If I'm doing something with a classical vibe, or straight rock or blues, then I also like to put everything in the same space.
Other times, I want the differing spaces to provide various levels of depth and space. Marco ( along with Chris (audiokid ) have pretty much always preferred to put everything into one ambient space, and there's nothing wrong with that, it's just their style.

There are two ways to mix when it comes to reverb - there's the "natural" vibe, where you want the tracks to sound as if they were all recorded in the same space, and then there's the "supernatural" vibe, where you want an ethereal, other-worldly feel.
There's no real "right" or "wrong" on this... it's a personal taste thing... unless the reverbs you are using are fighting each other, and washing out the definition and clarity of the tracks.

-d.

pcrecord Mon, 08/22/2016 - 06:53

DonnyThompson, post: 440680, member: 46114 wrote: Marco has a GREAT ear for this stuff.

Thanks Donny ! ;)

It's not that I have special powers or anything, it's just that I like when it sounds natural. Personal preferences only !!
If you let me decide, I'm the kind of guy who would put up the reverb level until I hear it and then turn it down a notch.
Many of my customers ask for a lot more reverb than I like and I respect that by delivering what they ask for. But mixing different kind of reverbs at the same time in a song is something I'm not inclined to. I'd rather put a duplicate of the same reverb with a different length than mixing a big room on piano and big hall on vocal..

We had this discussion about multiple verbs with Chris (Audiokid) if I remember. One thing that needs to be checked is if phases issues are not created with using multiple verbs.
Other than that, if it sounds good, go for it !! ;)