Since no one has chimed in yet, I'll at least make you feel welcome and listened to by saying this.... Listening on my laptop today, this is not my cut of tea for music or video but it appears you know what you are doing.

It was nice with my earbuds.. I'll try to listen at my studio tonight.. ;)

Ok I got to my studio late but here is what I think
The recording seems to been done nicely but the mix/mastering sounds a bit lowfi. Missing some presence in the high frequencies and a bit too much low mids.
Nice job !!

Nice song

Good mix, could use a bit of aural exciter or high self bump on the two bus, as seems a bit dark on the highs, but a great production, none-the-less