There is nothing there to bash. You are extremely accomplished at what you have done. It not only sounds fabulous, it's really quite fun to watch and I love your little pop-ups. It's freaking great!

To add a secondary element to your music video, it's not necessary to have your real-time video. So, I might suggest, that you take your tune/song and burn it to a CD. Then you go out with a CD capable boombox along with a camcorder. You lip sync to your song. You take your camera and your boombox to different locations and environments, lather, rinse & repeat in numerous locations. Now here is what will happen. The camcorder will pick up the extraneous audio from the boombox. You transfer your video then into your computer along with its crappy audio picked up from the microphone on the camcorder from the boombox. That audio track is then utilized as your synchronization source only. Once everything is synchronized, you'll simply mute that camcorder audio track. And that's how real music videos are done. You don't need to feed the boombox directly into the camcorder as it's only going to be used as a synchronization source.

And hey, you have some beautiful scenery in and around Tucson Arizona (where I have numerous family members and really love the place myself) such as also Lemon Mountain where you can find snow in the middle of the summer time! Of course you might want to wear something a little warmer than what you are wearing for your current video, LOL.

It's a great song you've done. Keep up the great work.
Mx. Remy Ann David

If you remix this, I would clear up the chorus vox tracks just a bit by adding a few db of 2.5k, it would be a big improvement.
Just a slight amount of ambiance verb on the verse Vox might do it good too. Not so you hear the verb, so it puts the VOX track just a bit back and glues it more with the music.

Nice job!