The timing is too loose for my taste and there isn't a strong melody. Might need some vocals or lead instrument all the way...
You might want to have the percs well played in time and follow them with other instruments, the other way around is hard to do even for the most experienced.

Where are you going with this ?

Please upload your audio file to your post by using the Upload File feature, located next to your Post button.
There are those of us here who don't use SoundCloud because of its sub par fidelity; SC is notorious for introducing lossy artifacts into the audio that it plays.
RO's built in media player is far superior, you'll likely get more people to listen that way.
The player supports up to 320kbps Mp3 resolution, and up to around 12 Meg file sizes.
The upload time on your end will depend on your local internet provider's speed, so be patient, it may take a few minutes.
FWIW
-d.