I like that , its really kicking energy .
Im on headphones . There is a build up of low frequencies here and its a rumble .
Not sure if thats what your after , but for me it too much rumble and became fatiguing .
If you address that it ,everything will be clearer . would like to hear again .

Hi there Smash,

Thanks for the feedback. I got a tip to make the frequencies below 100-200 Hz in mono and do a HP of the mono channel and stereo channels differently? Also added a solo and did a remix. Feedback on this updated mix most welcome:

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I got the same rumbling low end on near field monitors in the first version. The second sounds better, but a little...unnatural. I mean not quite the round, nice lows that I'd expect for the genre. It's not bad, just a bit lacking, I feel. Maybe a little less hp on that mono channel?

second one sounds good , my first impression on headphones is ,

The guitars on the sides are bigger than the drums in a disproportionate way .
almost as if the drums has a hi pass filter vs the guitars don't .
and the guitars have a low pass filter where the drums don't .
Thats the easiest way to explain what it feels like to me in the headphones .
maybe the drums could be widened to match the guitars better .

Id like to hear some others chime in , what do you guys think?

Id like to hear it again when you give it another tweak , it may only need a little tweak .
good stuff

Drums are a little thin - I'd agree Ash -- This is a pretty sweet song. And yes -- in the breakdown you could definitely add some screaming guitars or even sound effects - I start layering guitars and build up a guitar army frenzy before you get back to where you strip away and bring the vocal back in.... Make that section sound like the sky is actually falling -------